Ah...as I drink my morning Butter-Coffee (based off Tibetan Butter Tea)

Not a feedback post per say, just couldn’t help recognizing compassion for our yellow friend. 

Good poem!

Haha nope, I have a penis and identify as a guy. 

What a fun little poem! I think that sometimes poets get caught up in being deep and moving. This is a refreshing reminder that everyday items can be just as poetic as any other topic. 

This would be much better if properly formatted. You have to make sure to put a space after each line for it not to all show crammed up in a paragraph. 

Aside from that, I'm not sure if this is quite Shakespeare, but it's relatable and charming enough. 

I literally just made a poem about craving butter and everyone wants to over-analyze it...

The capitalization and rhyme makes me feel that the poem's shape could've been different. I like the romantic parody of this piece.

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Oh...How I crave you butter
Coming from my slumber
My want for you
I can feel it inside me
Like thunder
Oh...How I crave you butter
We were meant for one another 
Coming from my slumber 
Even though my health you plunder
Oh...How I crave you butter

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