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I take a trip to the attic of my mind

A window, a table, a chair

I take a seat, and enjoy the sunset

Because x, because y, because tea

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The tea floods my mind with happy memories

A night sky full of shooting stars

The embrace of a fire

And the kiss of the ocean’s breeze

This is my happy place now

Because x, because y, because tea

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I take a trip to the attic of my mind

A light bulb hangs dimly over the scene

My mind gets all fuzzy, and I don’t know what to do

Because s, because t, because you

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Greater than butterflies, I’m gifted with the entire zoo

It’s a lovely chaos

No blood, no tears, just love

I’m sure of one thing that’s true

This is my happy place now

Because s, because t, because you

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I take a trip to the attic of my mind

Where I can once again harness my pen with ease

The brush flows harmoniously against the paper

Because tea, because you, because me

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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/98ek0k/been_a_while_since_i_posted_this_is_for_the/

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/98eo5a/the_way_of_spirals_and_circles/

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First post here; I've never really received in-depth criticism before, so I'm curious to what you all have to say. edit: trying to fix spacing

Posted Aug 18, 2018, 10:34 PM UTC

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