[1178] Unexpected Delivery

Story (Comment Enabled Google Docs): Unexpected Delivery

So it's a quick short story in the genre of science fiction. I wrote this without any kind of idea of what I want to do with the piece. So I'm looking for broad level critiques, ideas for how the piece works and where I could take it.

I'm also curious to see if the morbidly comedic tone came through okay.

Of course anything else you would like to critique me on is welcome and appreciated as well.

My Critique: Here 2800 words