[1784] The Barn

Hey there — this is my first time submitting to the sub.

I've written a lot of non-fiction before, particularly journalism-based stuff, but this is my first time writing short fiction.

I'm most concerned with whether or not the story is interesting/engaging, if the character Henry is compelling, and help pointing out issues of show-don't-tell. I'm really open to anything, and would love serious criticism.

Thank you so much! Here's the story

Past critiques:

• The Kettle Knight [1719]

• Honor Council Ruling 1726 [866]