[2,374] Necrosavant, Chapter 1

I've been practicing writing a first chapter to try and get the hang of it, and this is the result. Hook, concept, character, setting, conflict, all tightly wound into less than 2500 words. I'm not used to long form writing, and first chapters are one of the most essential parts of any novel, since it's meant to encapsulate almost everything that the story is going to be about.

Right now my goal is to see if it's interesting enough that by the end of it the reader is hooked and wants to keep reading, so I'm looking for feedback in that direction. As always, general thoughts are always greatly appreciated. Thank you for your thoughts!

The work itself

My critiques:

The Hike-658

Stranger-1729