Red Blend

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Leaves and blood and wine
All red
As sitting in the autumn breeze
I feel the purple bruises form
And stare into my knees.
I do not quite remember how
The altercation started
But the end result I sit here with a
Black eye slowly forming
And a cut across my cheekbone that the
Tears cannot stop burning.
A heavy fist from in the dark
Careening like a car
Into the walls of mind and heart
To leave the wreckage there.
That Brother who had been at times
A refuge from the cold
Of unfamiliarity now stands
A stranger in the street.
I let the chill of this the night
That started in such revelry
Sweep in and do its worst upon
The heart and face that both now bleed.

The back door opens slowly and I
Hear the footsteps on the deck
I do not look around my eyes lock forward
I chose night instead
I feel a bag of ice and paper towels
Placed upon my face
I turn to see my brother there
As hate becomes erased
We give a nod and know the cause
Of all that we had done
No longer mattered and together now
We stare into the night.

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EDIT: I reworked the ending of the first stanza after line 11. Thanks for the feedback u/zachzebrowitz !

Posted Oct 15, 2018, 4:18 PM UTC · edited

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