Perspective

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I envied the stars once -

Gazed upon their shine,

Triangulated their great distance;

Thought them rivals mine.

I looked down upon the mountains,

Their peaks a-gleaming white;

Heights mortal to many men,

Yet unworthy of my sight.

But now, a little grown,

From this vantage I see;

Scenes which seemed my own,

In fact far beyond me.

But now, at times,

The grass seems a forest;

The doorbell distant chimes,

My eyes ever downcast.


Once, I felt so small,

A dwarf in giants' company;

Watched them play ball-

Dodged when it neared me.

Once, I regarded with awe,

All who taught and lead;

Thought of their having flaw

Scarce entered my head.

But now, a little wiser,

I don't hesitate t'approach;

Bar the occasional miser -

I'm no cockroach!

But now, at times,

I hear myself pour scorn,

At the slightest sign;

My heroes as leaves forlorn.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/9sdwx1/anthills/e8olaz3?utm_source=reddit-android

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/9rrxds/all_things_considered/e8nmgz2?utm_source=reddit-android

My first time posting something new! This poem lay half done for months and with the encouragement and prodding of this community to learn to rewrite and revise I finally managed to finish it!

For proper formatting:

https://www.reddit.com/user/MendyZibulnik/comments/9tzgz9/perspective/?utm_source=reddit-android

Posted Nov 4, 2018, 1:09 AM UTC · edited

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