The amethyst

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This is a very simple poem and appears to be a surface value piece. That being the case it needs to cause very strong images to the reader. I believe this could be a little stronger in that regard, but it certainly has imagery.

The first two stanzas are really one sentence on multiple lines, which I get causes some pauses and emphasizes the words. However the last stanza breaks this pattern by having two sentences in one stanza and I believe it would be stronger if you kept it to one. Also the abundance of "ight" sounds in the last stanza feels overwhelming and made me pause.

It also might be nice to have the final word rhyme with blue and true to keep with that pattern, but you may have chosen to not do that on purpose.

As a suggestion for the last stanza you could do something like: ​

It's true brilliance

Makes you Bask In the light

Of it's violet delight.

Thank you for sharing!

I like the simplicity but I couldn’t find any deeper meaning to this other than what I can read upfront. I like how you describe the purple of amethyst as shades of red and blue and that it shines true. I see the repetition of the word true both for it shining so maybe it’s so sort of revelation? I really don’t know and it’s kicking me because I really rather enjoy the language usage. Maybe Im trying to read too much into things but would appreciate knowing if there is something more that Im maybe missing. Very nice though and a poem getting you to think is the sign of a good poem in my opinion so good work! :)

For a description it definitely details the amethyst artfully and the flow is smooth. However, I would suggest adding a type of emotional connection to add depth to the poem and hook in more readers.