I wanted the snow to illustrate pale skin, but also  represent the subject’s stoic or “cold” nature, as the speaker is referring to their masculine lover. I love that you were able to sort of catch onto that. Thanks for reading!

Oh, I love this one. It feels calm and intoxicating at the same time. I love the delicate description of "warmth under a cranes wing." There's a dichotomy between the cold and childish image of snow in the first line and the warmth and maturity of the remainder of the poem, which could represent growing up, maybe. Overall, love it!

I find it smooth in writing. It's pleasing to read and see and the final line was the cherry on the top. Can't criticize much here and I don't see much flaws. Much love and keep writing!

Like a child tracing his wagon through snow

Hands caress

Giving all trust in delicate finger tips

With caverns and peaks, valleys and hills 

mapped out in your Adam’s apple

Pressed against touchy flesh

Warmth under a cranes wing

Reflections in the pools in your eyes

Introspection, a different dimension

Taking my heart to its cradle


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Like a Child Tracing His Wagon... (Free verse)