I feel like i’ll either completely remove now or just keep it as is as a refrain. keeping it in the first and last verses doesn’t make it flow nicely.     
And yes you could say it’s for those people who do nothing of substance and have great ambition and ideas but still do nothing    
thank you for the feedback

my personal thought, it didn't like "now", it's too repetitive, felt like forced, I would've liked "now" in starting two lines and in the end.

if I read it without now, I liked the rhythm and the concept of the poetry. and the ending is good, or should i say i liked all the lines and the flow.

if I am not wrong it is for those intellects (u r telling ur emotion, yes, but) who just slack and create ideas and do nothing, physically. at some point in time, the ideas start rotting within the person, without getting out in the physical world, and the person starts craving, to show his/her ideas to the world, or to change the world with the ideas.

I loved the repetition of the “now”, and I think this conveys the feeling of dread really well. The last stanza is like a punch in the jaw, but in a good way.

i’m glad you could relate to the feeling

I love it! 

I think the rhythm and repetition of "now" really displays the feeling depression and the drab rhythmic nature of life in a cool way

I love it! Great choice repeating the *now*’s, you executed it perfectly and I Really feel this poem, great job! 👍

i wrote this with the ‘Ghazal’ rhyming pattern, and my first line was: “i’m stuck in the inertia of rest now”. So my hand was forced to repeat the word ‘now’.    
Thanks for the feedback! I’ll either think of a different refrain, or just hold on to this and write another one because at times the repetition of ‘now’ also felt disconcerting to me

Great poem. Definitely could feel the emotions in it, made it pretty easy to relate to. Thanks for sharing. 

I am not sure if I am a fan of all the now's and they took away from the emphasis of the last word and overall punch from each line. Even putting now’s in between or before each stanza.

Hahaha yes! In a way this was my way of talking about my unproductive quarantine.    
This is actually written with the rules of a ‘ghazal’. And I needed a refrain in the end; which ended up being ‘now’    
Truth is, I don’t like the repetition and have been brainstorming ways to embellish it myself, so I am definitely going to look into it.    
Glad you liked that line! In slightly cloud weather at night, if you look at a full moon and the clouds moving away from it, you can experience a similar feeling

op, you really called me out for having the most unproductive quarantine hahaha!

but jokes apart, i really liked the style of this poem. i’m not really sure if i like the repitition of “now”, i think it’s just being a little TOOO a overused. otherwise, it’s pretty well-written!

my favourite line was:
>the moon’s ablaze, wispy clouds have flitted away
>a peculiar lunacy has made its way into my chest now

the very tone of the poem was very observational, lazy and procrastinating, so that really went well with the actual words.

overall, well-written, and may be consider removing the “now”?



the world is droll there is nothing of interest now   
i’m stuck in the inertia of rest now    
    


my emotions have peaked, my senses fatigued    
there’s nothing that i love or detest now    
    


the moon’s ablaze, wispy clouds have flitted away     
a peculiar lunacy has made its way into my chest now    
    


too high up i sit, this doesn’t feel like a gift    
i must thrash and kick myself out of this nest now    


all thoughts feel bogged, the heart has overextended from its job    
a referee is needed to stop this internal contest now    


the petty worries pile over, none of them ever getting older    
it is my own ideas in my head that are the pest now    


baggy eyes, cramped thighs every inch of my body cries    
this rest is fatal; we covet some work 
some unrest now     
       
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I can’t help doing nothing