[1209] Suite 62

hello all. This is a scene out of my novel. I got feedback on another chapter not long ago and want to make sure other scenes aren't plagued with the same mistakes. Here are some of the questions I have.

1. How is the dialogue?
2. Is there enough conflict
3. were you engaged?
4. how is the prose?
5. Did the characters seem interesting?

I haven't strictly edited it, so expect a few grammar errors. Please point out any ones that you think I may miss during editing if you wish, but I'm sure I'll notice some of the larger mistakes if there are any. Also, understand a few things may seem out of context since it's only a chapter. I'll give a bit to help you understand what's going on.

The MC daughter was stolen. He's meeting with the guy who hired them last night who he pissed off by demanding money for his daughter. The MC and his partner are going back to ask for help cause it's their only option.

critique: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/is1rxw/1237_finale_deathtacular/g5bgdpw?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3

my work: suite 62

Thanks for any feedback in advance

edit: please don't bother to give any more feedback. After comparing it to the other chapters in the book it's clearly lacking the emotion and passion they had. I phoned it in, just slightly tweaking the 1st draft instead of rewriting it all together as I should've done. So take my mistake as a lesson. If you don't feel passion writing it, don't write it at all.

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