[3445] One Who Walks With the Stars : Arthur's Introduction [1]

G’day me lovely Destructive Readers.

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Today, and this piece, will be the first in a three-part project, where the first ‘section’ of my long-term work in progress will be provided in full. So if this extract tickles your fancy, stick around because more’s on the way! If this is you, let me know, and I’ll give you a ping when the next part is released. This particular extract has been submitted before, but I felt like it’d be wrong to just slam the other two parts of the piece out there without context, and I’m still very much in need of guidance on it.

With enough words wasted, here’re my primary questions for this piece:

1. How does the page or so of interaction between Arthur and Alex feel? Is enough revealed to pique your interest about their relationship?

2. Does the narrative distance from Arthur feel justified? Why do you think we see so little of Arthur’s thoughts and feelings?

3. How does Arthur himself feel to you? Tolerable, empathetic even, or too much of a sad sap?

4. And finally, a very specific request: how would you describe my style of writing, in one or two sentences? I’m trying to clean my style up, but frankly I don’t even know what it looks like to other people! Some guidance here would make my soul-searching a lot easier.

For the mods: 1746 + 500 + 1650 + 477 + 1101 leftover from this 3885 and this 343 – 3455 = 2019 in the bank

The maths might be a bit off, but I promise I’m not leeching!

Also pinging u/PapilioCastor, in response to your request to do so on my last submission.

Thank you to anyone who reads or critiques this. Your effort and consideration is treasured, truly. Wishing you all good health and productive writing sessions.