[904] Entropy

Both very nervous and very excited to post my first work for critique! This is the opening to a novel that I am currently editing. I am specifically interested in critique about whether this hooks you into the book. Also, if you feel any attachment to the characters just based on the opening. Thanks to any and all feedback!

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Writing for critique:

Entropy

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Critiques:

[376] Tough Conversations

[1716] As A Diagnosis