Thank you very much for a positive feedback! It perhaps should be breath.. English is my second language and sometimes I get words wrong but I am super happy you felt the “mood” and flow. I hoped to paint a picture of the evening zen..

This is so nice, it feels light and airy (no pun intended! haha) May I ask if you meant "breath" in the first line? I stumbled on that phrase when I read it. Also, as you said you're attempting haiku, may I suggest adjusting the syllables in the last line? Maybe its me, but when I count the syllables I get 6 instead of 5. It flows pretty well though so you could keep it how it is! I love your theme and idea here!

Thank you very much for your positive feedback and suggestion! I was looking for the way to make it 5-7-5 but in my mind adding “The” would count as an extra one. This is when proper knowledge of the English grammar make a huge difference. My work is complete if you have enjoyed it.. 💓

The wind’s ten der lu la by (7) 🤷‍♀️

I enjoy this haiku. 
I second the other commenter in saying that this is currently 5-7-6
I would suggest maybe: 

‘The wind’s tender lullaby’ 

That’s just me though! 

I like the symbolism here and you’ve definitely touched on the naturalistic aspect of haikus, it makes me think of a relaxing sunset being viewed from the comfort of your own home. 

Beautiful work!

Hello and thank you for positive feedback and words of encouragement! I’ve taken on board other commenters’ suggestions. If I could edit title, I’d take “attempting” out now. Even thought I’ve being speaking primarily English for many years, the essence of the first spoken language stayed for life along with an accent..

Hello. This *attempting haiku* you posted comes alive every time I read it. I think you have received excellent advice from several people concerning the haiku syllable schemes. Please keep writing. You have a better grasp of the English language (than many of us native speakers) to write so well and beautiful. Keep it up and thanks for sharing.

Thank you so much! It’s most rewarding to make someone see that “picture”. I am glad you enjoyed it.. sometimes right words come from a different place than language. I just use wrong words occasionally.

I think your Haiku 'attempt' was a success :). The feeling of calm and peace you painted with the wind was quite pleasant to read, made me forget for a second about the harsh times currently. English is also my second language, but wouldn't have guessed it was also yours hahaha.

Light breath is kissing,  

Wind chime is gently singing 

Wind’s tender lullaby.

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Sunset (attempting haiku)