I’m so glad you were able to relate to this :) let’s keep searching for those words

“i wish i knew the words to tell you how i feel”- if this isnt the most relatable thing ive ever read, i dont know what is. this poem simultaneously made me smile and feel very alone.

I really appreciate this feedback! I love your description of the rhyme scheme, like breathing in the air of a lover. It’s a visceral feeling that I was trying to manifest through the flow of the words, so I’m glad you could pick up on it :)

This seems to be a somewhat happy thought to be kept awake by. I feel the naivety of this poet is about to get a wakeup call. 

I like the rhyme scheme, reminds me of breathing in the air of a lover. Simple yet profound. 

Not sure how to critique poems yet, as I see them as an art form. I do see some lines have complete sentences and others have no punctuation. I do this too. Not sure how to fix it. 

Thanks for sharing.

Haha you’re spot on! That’s exactly what I was going for with the rhyme scheme. The balance of having/not having teases of reality, almost enough to really feel it but deep down knowing I’m far from it. There’s definitely hope ingrained in there, you’re right! I feel for someone deeply but the pandemic might prevent me from ever telling her how I feel.

Learn to love lonliness, and you'll have a friend for life. The emotions you convey here are as common and healthy in moderation as olive oil or good butter. The releasing happiness I feel (i avoid commenting on purely negative posts) is in the little grains of hope, in the words that nearly rhyme, but don't! You love someone dont ya? And they love or loved you. It's a dying art... i wont get too philosophical! A smooth, sensitive gentle work of poetic reflection on having/ having not.

I’m so glad you were able to feel what I was trying to convey :) sometimes it’s nice to escape from reality

Damn. This hits deep. I love you how you came back on the lonesome part of life. Snap back to reality

 It keeps me up at night,

The thought of You...

Curled up beside me 

Your breath synced together with mine. 

&amp;#x200B;

Your touch, barely conscious

but always warm, always reassuring

These sensations so real and so stirring... 

&amp;#x200B;

I wish I knew the words to tell you how I feel

Would you turn to whisper the same in my ear? 

&amp;#x200B;

But as I lay here alone

My mind spirals deeper and deeper

And it’s these thoughts that pain me the most. 

&amp;#x200B;

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thinking of You