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ZooAttendendant

Our Last Day (A poem inspired by the Stock Market)

When our last day comes I’ll feel at ease

Blissful peace over deeds I’ve done

For right or wrong I played the game

With earnest aims and devil shunned

I waged I’d win though rigged the fight

I reached so high I left them stunned

Though now I sense amid my flight

A steadfast fall has just begun

They shot my wings, my red blood runs

A web of joy becomes undone

PAIN, PAIN, PAIN

My friends don’t run

I dare you, stay with me in the fray

It’s NOT our last day

The best is yet to come.

By; Henrry Gutierrez (@akiyolucho) • Instagram photos and videos

3/4/2021

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/lxxgoa/i_wonder_as_i_fall/gppwdub?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/lxrulv/skyscrapers/gppyf7z?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3

Posted Mar 5, 2021, 1:03 AM UTC

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gubjo•

I am sensing a gamble on GME? Your poem is very relatable and extremely relevant.

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ZooAttendendantOP•

Haha Not specific to GME, more to the overall market crash currently being experienced. But absolutely applicable to the GME saga.

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Podroig•

The best is yet to come is a brilliant line- like a message out from the stock enticing you in, with an almost siren like nature

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ZooAttendendantOP•

Well put, thank you.

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Rumi-312•

I know it’s about the stock but i didn’t see that when I first read it so interpreted it as a couple things, one could be substance abuse, which I guess make sense since the parallels can be similar, an addiction nonetheless, but the lines “A web of joy becomes undone” sounds like the come down “Pain Pain Pain” could be regret, then the last four lines could be the same enticement over and over, creating a vicious cycle, I like it, I feel like it’s a bit better without the title stating it’s about the stock market, but to each their own

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ZooAttendendantOP•

I love your interpretation, thank you so much. I completely understand your last point about the title, but I felt like providing some context, otherwise the poem may be to vague and easily forgotten. Also, I don't believe there are many poems written about the stock market so I'm carving out a niche lol.

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agree-with-you•

I love you both

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ticklemesally•

What a poem! Definitely feel I can relate to this and was nice to be given some context to what you were feeling while writing this. Particular key line is:

They shot my wings, my red blood runs A web of joy becomes undone

Great imagery and generally just a good poem. Wasn’t a huuuge fan of the repeated pain line but can see how others might :)

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zooattendedant•

What a compliment! Thank you so much, it's always great to have ones creation be appriciated :) ... Pain line was definitely something I kicked around for a while but I may polish it up, thank you :)

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