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I enjoy the sentiment being conveyed here. There really is nothing that can prepare us to part with somebody we love. In particularly rough moments during relationships, when it might be on the rocks, one often feels like it’s the most important thing; like they could die happy if they could have them back. That’s the feeling I get from this.

As for criticism, a couple of times you use ‘loose’ instead of ‘lose’. I assume you may have done this intentionally, but if you were intended to use ‘lose’ in the sense of ‘losing your keys’ or ‘losing your loved one’, I would just change the spelling of that.

Otherwise I really enjoyed this. Thank you for posting and keep writing :)

i love the raw emotion that this poem conveys about the narrator’s lover and how nothing really matters if they lose the one they love the most. i also think that the use of repetition is very thoughtful and conveyed the message of the poem very effectively! i while im definitely not a poet, here are my two cents of what i think you can improve on: you could add more imagery either about the lover or how you would treasure them.

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" So excuse me for taking care and treasuring, "

I totally felt this line. There's so many times that i've called, asked, tried to help... because I cared. God forbid that somebody cares about something right? Somehow without knowing all the details, I felt like I could connect with you. To me, that's what its all about. Poetry is about making others feel connected through words, and you hit the nail on the head with this one. Great Job!!