Introverted

I was easily transported to my room. A comfortable safe space with all the locks and barricades around me. Keeping me safe from the world yet a prisoner of myself. Scared to prick a finger, yet willing to starve to death.

I like how my imagination worked from the first line to the last. It's like a motion picture.

I found the message of your poem interesting, about an isolated person who longs for connection yet pushes people away out of fear of getting hurt. the last bit "living the dream within me" got to me, because it really sums up how much easier it is to fantasize about having meaningful relationships than it is to actually find them. when a poem is called "introverted" admittedly I'm half accepting an angsty poem about how much the narrator hates people (I mean, which is fine!) but this was kind of refreshing and relatable. I really like the imagery you created in words like "entangled crowed" and "tarnished by reality". for things to improve, there are places where I thought you "told" instead of "showed" if that makes sense. "And I am scared they will find my extroverted facade to be fraud" is not a bad line but it doesn't leave much to the imagination, there could be a more metaphorical way of putting this, like something about an extroverted facade starting to decay (idk just speaking from the top of my head). overall I liked this poem.

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