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asearchforyou

The Oldest Home in Hamilton County

The oldest house in Hamilton County

sits in the federalist style

among rolling hills

that must one day have been a sugary delight to the eye.

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Two centuries later, the forest is gone

an interstate runs by like a cough

and the home is flanked by Navient's corporate headquarters

and an iconic blue box store full of put-it-together-yourself furniture.

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If I had clout

and enough capital,

I would carefully pick up the historic residence

and crane it 200 feet to the northeast.

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That would place it on top of IKEA's flat roof

at an interesting angle,

an Erwin Wurm sculpture

for an I-69 audience.

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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/max1vq/lotus_eater/gs0tha3/?context=3

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/mbu8t0/why_is_love_so_scary/gs0o9rf/?context=3

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Posted Mar 24, 2021, 10:53 AM UTC · edited

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Siamese_Dreaming•

i like the narrative of the poem, i guess you are touching on how things that are old and beautiful (like the house) do not have a place or are not valued in modern society? the way you would crane the house on top of an Ikea roof like a sculpture makes me think the narrator wants to make a political statement of sorts about consumer culture. I think your poem's extremely well written concerning unique word choice, "sugary delight to the eye" is pleasing to me. "an interstate runs by like a cough" is an interesting simile because it conveys an idea that modernism is a kind of illness (not sure if that's what you were going for). and the attention to detail with the "put-it-together-yourself furniture" is great. I'm not sure if I have picked up on your intended meaning but I enjoyed your poem.

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asearchforyouOP•

There isn't an intended meaning, per se. Just a question posed. Thank you for talking a walk around my sprawling old farm house! IKEA has great meatballs and free coffee.

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Low-Tie-9668•

I’m sure there are many things one could say that this is trying to say. Maybe you’re message is the same as Wurm’s, I’m not really sure, so I’m not going to comment on that. I just want to say, that I think you’re fantastic at using this medium. The picture and link not only provide reference, they also save you from having to explain anything to death, keeping your idea in focus, and not the sculpture.

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