[1309] Chapter 1 - The Dance of Gods

This is the first chapter of a story idea I came up with. Generally, I just want to know your thoughts - what you liked/disliked. If you are inclined to give more specific feedback, I would love to hear about the mechanical side of my writing (is there enough question hooks, are they intriguing...) and the ending (are you interested enough to read on) as I currently feel that although the concept is cool its not necessarily gripping.

Story: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1x9spuQBKvHNYRkjsTlLiO6RJe2Vym-4xUrQdUK1_9Us/edit?usp=sharing

Critique: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/ot0m9o/1490_partial_chapter_1_silence_in_the_sands/

Thanks you and I hope you enjoy!