Blowing bubbles

He sits apoun his ledge quite and meek blowing bubbles

Mentioned in hushed and disproved tones

Known by all spoken too by none

Hes your best friend and passing thought

Nothing to him but he's on everyone's mind

We've all seen him once and will all meet him once

He has many names and anymore faces seen different to all

Accepted by some feared by others

He is the end the tail that's to be endlessly devoured

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Posted Aug 13, 2021, 6:54 PM UTC

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dopatraman•

This poem is almost like an old myth about old titans watching the earth age. It seems as though the person in the first line "He sits apoun his ledge quite and meek blowing bubbles" is the entropy of the universe itself.

He exists in all places, with a tail being endlessly devoured, as if he is like Jormungandr, the Norse serpent who encircles the world.

One thing I am curious about it this line:

"Mentioned in hushed and disproved tones"

Are people afraid of the man blowing bubbles? Is what he is doing taboo? I'm curious as to why he is mentioned in hush tones.

Thank you for sharing this.

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BasicAd720OP•

It's death I got the Inspiration for this after I saw the 18th century painting of death blowing bubbles and the hushed and disproved being that death is a uncomfortable topic for most

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Krause_Monet•

" He is the end the tail that's to be endlessly devoured "

Pardon me, but I didn't quite understand this line. Would you mind explain? The rest of it I feel I have a fair grasp on but I feel the poem's tone is a bit off, in what way wish I could explain but I can't.

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BasicAd720OP•

I trying to incorporate the idea that no matter what where there's life death will follow or the ouroboros like cycle of life

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You should checkout the English football club West Ham, they're club song is called 'forever blowing bubbles' so i thought it would be interesting for you?

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