[1382] Echoes of the Ages

This is the prologue of a (currently mid-revisions) 120k word dark epic fantasy.

I've been querying for a few months to no avail and have recently (the last week or two) started a pretty drastic set of revisions (this prologue used to be my chapter #1 and clocked in at 3x the word length, as an example). Any feedback you can provide would be greatly appreciated.

link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1F5RCFEc9lpfl9Oec_toYIhawmb7mnyzh1oD0doDgbao/edit?usp=sharing

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