For whom?
Posted Aug 24, 2021, 5:05 PM UTC · edited
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I love this poem so much. It reminded me to be thankful for the reasons I'm still alive. The short lines and direct demands make it seem less condescending than other poems trying to do the same thing. It reminds me of that type of friend you're lucky to have that introduces you to new things and makes you feel loved. This is the type of poem that they would write as well as the person that comes to mind when I read it. Thank you for such a moving poem.
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aww, your comment really made me smile. It makes me so happy that you liked it. Thank you for sharing your thoughts! :)
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You're so welcome! I love reading poetry on this subreddit, but I don't often save the poems to look back at later either because I don't like the poem all that much or I don't see a reason to do so. I did save your poem though because I want to read it again and remind myself of the things I mentioned in my other comment. I'm very glad it made you smile!
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Interesting poem— one thing I would say is that I don’t think you gain anything by using “u” instead of “you”. There’s nothing in this that makes me think that the more colloquial “u” ought to be used in either tone or content. Otherwise I think this works as a nice meditation of sorts. Well done!
Thank you! You are definitely right. It was not on purpose, I just forgot to change it back from my notes hahaha :) (I edited it now)