[2293] Cybergeddon

Hey guys!

I'm going to be straight up with you. I've never written anything in my life. Sure, as a kid I wrote stories and such for myself and my friends. I've also always been quite skilled at writing research essays due to my major, but I've never gone out of my way to try and build a full fledged story with a vast universe. With that being said, I am happy to accept constructive criticism!

I also want to give a brief description of the universe before you start reading and critiquing so here it is.

In the year 2030, a group of underground hackers known as PROXY gained inside access to many of the world's largest superpowers. This led to a synchronized nuclear attack that completely wiped out 80-90% of the world's population. Fast forward 150 years and Earth is a complete wasteland. Although most of Earth now operates via local settlement government, PROXY's presence is still felt throughout the world. Nobody knows who they are, what they are, and their purpose for decimating the planet.

The story takes place from two perspectives. The first perspective is from Ezekiel Balimer, a bounty hunter living in what was previously known as Washington DC. After accepting and completing a specific job, he finds clues as to what PROXY is and what their newest intentions are.

The second perspective is from Agent 0, a prototype mimic agent for PROXY. He receives an assignment from the agency that eventually leads him to hunt down Ezekiel Balimer and the uprising he soon creates.

Please critique me on the following.

• Sentence Structure
• Environment Descriptions
• Themes
• Setting
• Continous writing habits
• Any personal opinions you all have

My Submission [2293]: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tvDteWdFi8BfDfvPpHu8VsmPjzgBxJTjdWtg0Ix3Q7A/edit?usp=sharing

My Critique #1 [1687]:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/pjok6a/1687_to_the_city_excerpt/

My Critique #2 [1101]:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/pl6mdi/1101_into_the_alley/