[565] Knock

My absolutely shameless attempt at imitating Carver.

Lately, I've grown a lot more fond of minimalist writing and I've been attempting to apply what I've been learning. And I've realised it's an incredibly difficult style to deftly execute. The following piece is me practicing writing in this style. And, as mentioned, it's painfully derivative of Carver. Still, I'd like to know which features of minimalism I'm perhaps doing well and which features you believe I'm lacking in. Did I give enough? Or too much? Could you picture the scene? Is the feeling of a poignant unsaid evoked?

Gonna use leftover words from this post if that's okay.

Story.