[500] Will you hate me if I murdered you?

Hey guys, this is a revised update of my previous 500 word flash fiction. I took on board some criticisms from last time, and hope to do so again.

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BulSRn3X00m4J-zJ3uNWAM_sn9ekQiaL33fDW5kgp3Q/edit?usp=drivesdk

Critique: [3469] Used 499 words already https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/peotzh/3469_echoes_of_the_ages_chapter_1/hbh2tvh?utm_medium=android_app&utm_source=share&context=3