[2371] The Dragon and the Doors, Chapter 1

Hey everyone! This is the first chapter of my book. It takes place in the 1990s, in an alternate history/modern fantasy where magic was discovered in the 1960s. The main characters are a pair of autistic boys, whose experiences of autism are based on my own. I'd particularly like to know about any points that seem to drag (and if so, why that might be), and if my voice is reasonably consistent through the chapter. I'm trying to describe the events that happen to a kid without necessarily restricting myself to the vocabulary and sentence structure of one, so I'd appreciate any feedback about that too.

[Here's the story] (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Athy__aqR4k9vjnc5J2GmW-azx1hEVRPLY13TTOMlJc/edit?usp=sharing)

Here are my critiques:

[565] https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/pobvr7/565_knock/hd0i425/

[2094] https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/ppppzf/2094_over_sea_under_star/hd9yu1j/