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Thoroughly enjoyed this! Felt like I was absentmindedly people watching with a real feeling of inner peace.

I like this :) you could add even more stuff to it though. It’s a pondering and sweet poem.

Airports are an interesting place though because they are full of different people, new beginnings. It’s a very interesting theme for a poem and I think you caught that and made a point very well..

Writing is awesome cause you can only get better and better at it. But I liked your poem, hope you keep writing!

Ok, this one is kinda awesome. First of all I really like the subject matter, a sweet pondering poem about one of the most blandest places on earth, like no one ever goes to an airport terminal and thinks 'ah! this is poetic' but here you are :-) Also I really like how the poem builds up para to para, you start with an intro, then there is familiarisation and then the third para...that one is my favourite by far. The implications of those lines, 'No roots-your kin', you somehow managed to make me feel loneliness and at home at the same time, I don't know what you were going for but for me personally the contrasting elements are doing it. So basically...yeah very cool.^_^

Alliterative pairs:

• "something soothing" (OOX-ooo rhyme)
• "airport's ambience" (OOX-sxx)
  • The previous two may be considered autologically 'soothing' - voiceless "s" and onsetless "a"
• "terminals full of transients"
  • Etymonically oxymoronic
  • Summarizes theme
• "stranger's songs" (strangers'?)
• "I feel I don't fit" - "don't" autologically interrupts alternation.

Nobody belongs

To these tall halls.

Where stranger's songs

Bounce off walls.

The rhymes here all have the same vowel, openly vary onsets, and alternate codas between "ng" and "ll" with optional "s". In other words, *|ɔ|'ŋ/l'(s). This uses IPA notation for consonant/vowels extended with:

• | separates onset, nucleus, and coda
• * means 'anything'
• 'ŋ/l' means 'either /ŋ/ or /l/'
• (s) means 'optional s'

*|ɔ|'ŋ/l'(s) captures: "tall", "halls", "songs", and "walls". 'ŋ/l/f' would further include 'off'.

"(t/w)here" is repeated, including a couple times parechesically: "here nor there", "here where".

"I"/"my" is repeated eight times in the last two stanzas; the meaning '(not) home' in every.