[825] A Scuba Diving Accident

We follow a guy from a stranger's apartment to a café and ultimately the beach; the story turns on developments in his perspective on love, life and loneliness.

I had two main goals:

• I wanted to cast shadows and suggest a story much bigger in scope than flash fiction normally covers
• I wanted the ending to feel inevitable, not to be a gotcha -- for the curtain to come down with a thud, not a bang.

Not sure how well I accomplished either of those things -- still figuring out how much I need to give readers.

As usual, please give me the ABCs:

• What was awesome?
• What was boring?
• What was confusing?

Critique: [1,679] Eternal Damnation

Story: [Removed]