[2834] Jaguar and The White Wolf - Prologue & part of Ch.1 (a sci-fi story)

This is the start of my 2nd Draft of my novel "Jaguar and The White Wolf", I'm guessing it's going to end up being at least 80,000 words at some point, the first draft was only around 55k but I hadn't written the last 3rd of the book because I wanted to do some major overhauls first.

What I've linked here:

The prologue and part of the 1st chapter.

What I would like to know:

• Does this beginning do a good job of making you interested in the rest of the story?
• What are your expectations and assumptions about the story going forward?
• What questions do you have about the setting after reading this?
• Any structural feedback and/or word choice suggestions?
• Does it flow well?

Synopsys of the entire book (although I suggest reading this afterwards):

! (This story will eventually contain NSFW content)!<

!"Jaguar and The White Wolf" follows the lives of several characters after the last humans find refuge at an alien space station called "Haven". This story explores the naivete and horrors of both humanity and aliens alike.!<

!The story follows Saris (later named "Jaguar"), and his life as he is enrolled in the "Law Enforcement Assistance" program. Essentially, he is the alien equivalent of a police dog, burdened with the duty of proving humanity's usefulness to the alien alliance that rules Haven. He encounters other humans and creatures that shatter his views of the world and of himself. !<

!10 years after his partner dies, he goes rogue on a mission to free humanity. Saris is hunted down by "The White Wolf", a once fellow LEA agent, and the new generation of human cadets under his command.!<

!After a chance encounter with The White Wolf, Saris finds his heart being torn between his mission to free humanity, and his strange and incredibly inconvenient attraction to his enemy.!<

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Google doc Links:

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Comments Enabled: Here

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Critique:

I had another critique also but I think the post got deleted.

[5875] A Night to Survive

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