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Hello everyone :)

I'm posting this story for the second time. Last time I posted it I got a lot of good feedback and worked on the piece more.

Link to story: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1a4ji0ZCCYy7yAK-yLDwqIHh0WWzk-vlXRGMHpGPv8Ho/edit?usp=sharing

(Comments would be appreciated if possible)

Link to critics:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/qcv5bb/739_night_drive/hicb1j1/?context=3

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/qc7lop/487_warm_house/

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I'm posting this piece again and would like feedback on specific points:

- Overall impressions

- Do you care about the main character? Their journey? Their emotions?

- Impressions on my general style of writing

- Does the story flow well?

- What do you think about my descriptions? for example, the description of settings.