[970] Flashback Scene

Hi all. Some of you might remember my first post about my Stone in the Dark, novel.

What I'm sharing today is a flashback one of the main character's has. It's brief, and should mostly stand on its own, so not being familiar with my other post shouldn't be an issue.

Some questions I'd like you to think about while reading this brief excerpt:

• How's the writing: I think my style had evolved a bit since my last post, as I've tried to focus more on expanding and characterizing the POV character. Some of you might remember Arthur, and how little development he had. Hopefully Flora (the character in this excerpt) is better.
• The theme: This flashback isn't just to explore Flora's past, but to touch on one of the novel's central themes. How do you think this is handled? What's your interpretation. Is it too abstract, a bit silly, not done well, etc.
• Characters: I should note that this flashback happens roughly 70,000 words into the novel, so you've missed a bit of Flora's character. But what do you gather from her based on this brief excerpt? This is more for my ensuring relative consistency in her character.
• Things you like and don't like.

Critique: 1110 Here

Link: Here