[482] A Heavy Burden

This is the first draft of a PoV for a book about necromancy. I think it's a bit rough, but I like the idea and want a bit of feedback on how it comes across.

Is the setting clear to you?

Does the dialogue feel natural, or does it seem nonsensical, once you finish the page?

Thanks for your time, I hope you enjoy my bit of weird.

Story: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nVPtB4HWES37RGPk4dNYDdtaj19Ovj-AA3fAA4J3quQ/edit?usp=sharing

Crit: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/r9gjpy/2809_the_road_to_zakhar_chapter_6_v2/hnku2f0/