[2809] The Road to Zakhar - Chapter 6 v2

It hasn't been that long, but I'm back with a major revision. To new readers: this chapter can be read as a standalone piece. It's a fantasy story set in a LitRPG world where we follow NPCs rather than players. That makes it a bit difficult to determine its genre, so I've opted to simply put "fantasy" as this label covers a vast swath.

Last time, a common piece of feedback was that this chapter suffered from a lack of descriptions. I've incorporated this as well as other words of advice and I'm hoping that as you read you'll ease into an interesting world and enjoy the time spent there.

I'm looking for the common culprits: story, plot, pacing, characters, prose, and general impressions whatever they may be.

As I did last, I am posting the story on my subreddit and I am hoping this won't be a bother to those of you accustomed to Google Docs.

With no further ado: The Road to Zakhar - Chapter 6

Critiques:

[3714] Mala-of-mine (Stone Age Novella - Part One)

[2638] Steamcaster - Prologue Part 1

[2662] Stealing from the Blood King