Glad I could help! 

Tbh I’m never sure if a line break works the same as full stops but I thought with your poem you don’t need the ambiguity! 

What’s it about? It has a feel of death about it

Oh I love this feedback, thank you! I updated it there 😊 no I wasn't going for that. I want it to be read slowly and funnily enough when I read it out loud I didn't think of playing more with punctuation. Thanks :-)

I really love this! I think it would be awesome if the commas were full stops which would slow the reader down and force some silences into the poems. With the commas, you’re forced to read it quite quickly. Is the lack of silence in the reading something you wanted? I quite like irony in my own poems so thought I would check

Very nice piece. The best part is the listing of numerous definitions of silence and then asking a person for silence.  What does the narrator want? Everything and nothing.

Thanks for this feedback, I love that you enjoyed it 😊

I think this is really cool and well executed. The last two lines had a good amount of impact, and I'm always a sucker for short, clipped sentences that trickle into longer streams as you read on. 
 That said, I found myself left wanting a little bit. Part of me wanted to be shown an example of silence being hurtful, kind, cruel etc - as a concept this has so much potential, and it would probably be loads of fun to just sit there and write out all the different things silence can be. In fact I kinda want to try it 😅 
 Anyway, those are my thoughts, I enjoyed reading this!


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Silence can be hurtful.

Silence can be powerful.

Silence can be kind.   

Silence can be difficult.

Silence can be cruel.  

Silence can be peaceful.   



I need silence from you now.

My hopeful heart hears words and meanings that are not spoken from your lips.   




Give me Silence.


K.B






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The bliss and pain of silence