[2294] Fantasy in an atypical setting

Hello everyone. Below is a link to a section of short story I have written. This is essentially part 1/3 of the story itself. I will post more of it as I am able to critique other's work and get feedback on this section. I write fantasy and have yet to have a story published which is partially why I am here. Please don't hold back. I can take about as heavy-handed of criticism as is out there. Thank you!

My Story: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tLxip15BY-E_6REcro5mncGuFwTmP-n9AvrXntbGc7w/edit?usp=sharing

My Critiques:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/rzh7bg/3126untitled_fantasy_heist_story/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3