The dissections of self was one of the themes I was striving for. Glad it landed. Thank you for the feedback.

I like how this makes one’s reflection a completely different being. It gives the viewer an easier time to dissect the idea of the “self.” 
It’s also very relatable as I think everyone has contemplated their reflection and looked for what they see as either the good or the bad. 
Lastly, I like how it ends. I like the idea that the writer is now seeing themself as a friend. 
Excellent job.

Love it, great work! I really like the questions at the end, allowing the reader to answer in their own mind, making the poem very personal.

No problem-- if you have any questions, just give me a shout :)

Thank you for the wonderful feedback. You shared some really great concepts that I wasn't aware of fully. I will work this into my next work.

I think that what we need to look at with this piece is structure --which is super-fucking fun, I love playing with structure-- so lineation and stanzas. Just incase you don't know, a stanza is like a poetry paragraph and it's a way to break the poem into bite-size pieces of information. And lineation is just where you cut the line. You use these to affect the way someone reads or recites your poem.

In the first three lines of your poem we have longer lines, which means that these are read faster --everytime you move onto a new line, the reader has to take a few milliseconds to move down. This small gap directly effects how the piece is read and how the voice of the poem, or the speaker, sounds to the reader. Then after the first three, the lines become shorter, and the pace is slowed.What I think you may need to do here, is edit those inital lines, in order to keep the pace steady throughout the piece -- here's a rough example:

>Who is this being that I see  
in the mirror before me


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Oh yes of course, I misspoke , English second language ,meant it in a sense of “if one committed an atrocious action and they’re a better person now , they should not (forget) the type of person they were before” my bad here

That sentence is not about forgetting, it's about forgiving. One can beat themselves up on mistakes they made or any past transgression, but growth IMO stems from forgiving onesself and then learning from the experience.

Personally I think it’s fine to not forgive yourself for things you did in the past, it’s use them as a constant reminder that you are better now , better to look forward to the person you’re becoming without forgetting what you once were.

Who is this being that I see in the mirror before me...

It’s that familiar stranger, beneath the dry-erase affirmations who I see time and time again.

Always looking to make a connection with you, but only seeing your shadow casting before me.

Day after day,

Through your shadow,

I’m beginning to understand you.

As I use my awareness to look more deeply,

I can see your flaws hidden within,

flaws that eluded me time after time,

but now seem as clear as a midnight summer sky.

This being reflected before me, that I long to connect with and love.

Who are they?

What do they fear?

Why do they do the things they do?

And how can we forgive them for what weighs heavy on their mind?

Questions that we can answer in time, now that we are able to see one another.

See you tomorrow my new friend.

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Looking in the mirror