I treated you like an object
You were part of a plan
I miss your eyes
Your salty ocean soul
Self-sabotaging was my goal
I'm tired of this world
I want to get a dog
I need to have a plan
Simple is fine
Ego sublimes
Posted Jan 22, 2022, 3:06 PM UTC
I enjoy this, mostly because I relate to it. I like how you said “I want to get a dog”, and then followed up with more unrelated topics. Sounds like my mind when dealing with some of my mental Health issues, good work :)
Nice ending! "Ego Sublimes" was interpreted as a chemical verb for me — "(of a solid substance) change directly into vapour when heated, typically forming a solid deposit again on cooling." The descent of the poem mirrors the slow dissociation with oneself we experience after a break-up; especially when we regret what led to the break up — "self sabotaging was my goal". One "condenses" in a way. Something leaves.
Nice piece. Thank you for posting.
Your explanation was insightful, this captures what I was feeling.
lol I'm sorry but when I got to the line "I want to get a dog" I laughed. I don't know if that was the intent, but it felt humorous to me to jump from a serious topic of mistreating someone/regret/fed up with the world to "I want to get a dog". As if it is this simple, the dog will fix all these problems. But you know what, maybe it *could* help. Get a dog, make that your current plan. Thanks for sharing.
It's a good hearted plan at least. And don't be sorry, I'm glad it made you smile.
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Seems like a lot is going on here, (hence the title?) and probably these are the load of thoughts in your head? Pain of separation, difficulty moving on with your life? I hope you do better man, take care!