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TheMagicWheel

Killing An Arab

(inspired by the novel 'The Stranger' by Albert Camus)

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Hot sun

squinting white

cracking sea

glinting white

on moving waves

drinking

laughing

girls on a white beach

cracking sun

on my head

thinking about my neighbour

kicking his dog

salty sweat

stinging my eyes

- instead of the salty tears I didn’t cry at my mother’s funeral -

between rocks

sand glinting

a moving person

a moving shining knife

a hot gun

languishing in my pocket

is in my hand

cracking bullets

one

the arab is falling

between salty rocks

and

bloody water

in the sweating hot sun

one, two, three, four

more bullets

in the body

- make sure he is fucking dead-

lying between

rocks

blood red.

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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/sa60nl/comment/htvk654/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3

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Posted Jan 23, 2022, 1:19 PM UTC

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TheMagicWheelOP•

thanks for your reply I appreciate your ideas. I wanted to break the structure that's why I inserted that extra long line. A novel in shorthand? perhaps... An experiment at using the same words in repetition? also

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NYCPANDA_POEMS•

This was very easy to visualize. this poem is fucking awesome! I love the end

" make sure he is fucking dead-
lying between
rocks
blood red."

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I can see what your poem is describing truly amazing!

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TheMagicWheelOP•

thanks

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