A broken music
I will grab a note
write in there a music Note
possibly you will read it, possibly you will not
Because it meant to be a music that you will dote
but I don't have a Piano, I crushed all his keynote
It's broken, I said sorry, but healing he cannot
I pressed a key but all I could hear
Is a ugly sound, a tearing full of fear
afraid of getting abandoned and remain all alone here
I pressed other keys hopeful
would it work even when it's messed up that awful
but the screaming went unbeautiful
In pain, whining, crying, that was disgustful
but this is it, this is the rythmes, that's what I wanted to play.
Posted Jan 25, 2022, 9:23 PM UTC
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