Sonnet for the calling road

I love the way this poem shifts from "grabbing my opportunity" then "consoling the partner", it has got good sequence.

and soon I’ll be returning with the dawn

This line is appealing.

I'm not confident enough to speak on the sonnet technicality part, but this poem had some beautiful lines and imagery that were nice to read.

This definitely gives me a reassuring feeling. The way the speaker conveys their love for the subject and yet you can see they have no choice but to be pulled away by whatever circumstance they are going through- and yet they are very hopeful about it. With "Take heart! Don’t cry, for while I’m gone you’ll know / the reasons that you keep my body close;" they are certainly confident in their relationship with the subject. But even so, they go on to show with the imagery of the cures to the metaphorical ailments that being parted affects the speaker just as much as the subject. It's very nicely done, and works well with the rhyme. Thank you for writing~

Hey Tech, great work in meter as always! Your sonnets, in particular, are usually top notch. This one is no exception, and I think the transient lover theme fits perfectly with the format. Your rhymes throughout are perfect, save the rhyme of “promptly” and “softly” in the first stanza, they don’t really rhyme to my ear at all. I appreciate the know how it takes to end on the extra unstressed syllable though. While I do think the poem as a whole is strong and cohesive, I think you could tighten up the imagery some in the third stanza. The “medicine” line, while great, doesn’t really seem to go with the “calling road” theme. “Take heart!” And “wheresoe’er” kind of stand out as outdated language, but I’m not totally opposed to it. I would at least get rid of the inflection on wheresoever, I found myself reading it without anyway. Overall though, Tech, I think this was another strong showing from you, I always keep an eye out for your work! Until next time!

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