[1804] Mist - Prologue
This isn't the first thing I've ever written, but it is the first thing I've ever written with real aims to edit and get it good enough to try to go the traditional publishing route. I've let a casual writing group read it and got generally positive comments, but I was also to nervous to get harsh critique. Wanted to put it somewhere where I'm truly anonymous to get completely honest feedback.
Mist is a working title, and I don't particularly care for it. Just using it as a place holder. It doesn't dive to deep in to the fantasy elements in the prologue but this is in the fantasy genre. I'm not great with trigger tags. But just mentioning there's some violent imagery at the beginning, but I don't think it's too bad.
Khamai lives in a city that is dying. There aren't enough jobs to go around. Food is expensive and often spoiled, families cluster together in houses too small for them. The population is dwindling under the weight of decay, and violence takes one life a day, like clockwork. The broken down vacant houses that line the city streets are a safe havens for gangs that target the vulnerable, for what little coin they have. Either through force or addiction. Obol will get you high, before it kills you. The Drachs that find their way into the gangs' hands will just kill you. Everyone else seems to just accept that this is the way it is. Khamai wants to know why.
[Not great at blurbs, but it's what I've got right now]
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Posted Feb 17, 2022, 7:23 PM UTC · edited