[1648] Mr. Dundas

Not sure what to say about this one. I'm very eager to read people's thoughts on it. Is it good? Is it horrible? I have no idea. But it's weird. Thanks in advance for any crits or Google Doc comments.

Story: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1KA_oJLRlnxe9_Lzi4LYyO9Bb_ttrfFwYJHXgkEJbzzs/edit?usp=sharing

Critique: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/suwybi/1804_mist_prologue/hxhwbg4/