A prologue [1450]

Hi all!

This is my first post here. Just a heads up: English is my second language.

This is a prologue I'm working on for a story. It's an introduction to the main character. I would like to know how it feels and any comments, suggestions, observations or critics are more than welcome.

My previous critique: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/retzlz/3000_courage_draft_2_part_3_nsfw/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3

The doc: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tjMaM0fFtWkzSjGFjwkUdGiaoOBi1DeV/edit?usp=sharing&ouid=108622646764997077740&rtpof=true&sd=true