[1911] Pin-Up Girl Chapter 1

First time sharing my work. This is the first chapter of my fiction novel. It's inspired by students I have worked with in a residential treatment program and by my own experiences.

Looking for any and all feedback.

Plus two things specifically:

1. General impressions of the character. Is she one you could root for?
2. How close is this chapter is to being ready to send to literary agents?

Pin-Up Girl Chapter 1

Here's a summary of the novel:

In the summer of 2018, Sage Kahrs wraps up her junior year of college struggling with grades and substance abuse. She is bright and altruistic, but impulsive. Following a confrontation with her dysfunctional family, Sage makes a series of spontaneous decisions that lead her to meeting Tyler, an attractive and charming photographer traveling the country in his built-out van. Fleeing an unfulfilling collegiate life and latching onto what seems to be a predestined twist of fate, Sage accepts Tyler’s invitation to join him in his cross-country van travels through various national parks. The two of them kindle an intense attraction that leads to a passionate yet tumultuous relationship. Their combined creativity and ambition generate an Instagram account that launches Sage into the spotlight and presents a timely opportunity for the two of them to leverage a profit, though simultaneously challenges the foundation of their relationship. Throughout the summer, Sage’s careless decisions land her in problematic situations as she wrestles with more personal issues than she acknowledges. Pin-Up Girl is an intimate and messy tale of grief, privilege, the Gen Z American Dream, and the strife of growing up as a woman in the internet age.

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And my critiques:

[2782] Lark (Working Title) Chapter One

[1484] Mr. Jones Down On the Ground - Opening Scene