[2140] Blackrange Ch. 1 (Rewrite)

Blackrange Ch. 1

I swear this will be my last submission on this project for a while.

I took pretty much all of the feedback for this chapter from last time and tried to do something with it:

1. Earlier introduction of the magic at play

2. Linear time edits

3. Less stage direction, hopefully

4. More questions answered, hopefully

Let it sit for a while, still too content with it, so here it is for general destruction.

Feedback: Would you keep reading? Otherwise, as always, any and all.

Crits:

[3293] Untitled Short Horror Story

[1450] A Prologue

[468] Morzan and the Farmer excerpt