The Circle is I
Commencing ascension
Apprehension of either
Neither out nor in
From within
Beginning the ending
A sphere in rotation
White light blinding in
Laughing proclamation
The cosmic comedy recites
Prayful observation lies
And its relation to me -- I see
The devil and god
Sit no longer at level
Upon each shoulder
Instead, they bolster
Both hands
Swallowed in cotton socks
Hugging skin; I play pretend
The Happily Ever After amnesia
The end breaks transcend
The begin, I've forgot
Edit: p.s. constructive criticism, critique, or advice is optimal. Thanks for reading :]
Posted Apr 6, 2022, 6:06 PM UTC · edited
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