you were a fairytale a delicate scented flower that grounded me with your ever so resilient roots and i was the earth beneath you, or so i thought but now thats where your memory lies on the tip of my tongue on the edges of insanity and in a windowless home- a home that requires a million witnesses to be called "home"
Posted Apr 25, 2022, 5:28 PM UTC
I like the image of a flower, delicate and beautiful, having roots strong and resilient enough to ground the earth, the narrator, beneath it. Continuing on from that, perhaps the fragility of the flower was the reason for its subsequent absence as I interpreted from the poem ("thats where your memory lies on the tip of my tongue[...]").
The image of the windowless home, and the notion that the home "needs a million witnesses to be called 'home'" threw me off a bit. I am not sure what this (especially the latter half, about the witness) has to do with the beginning of the poem, but I think a bit more elaboration and context would help.
About the witness part,yeah it doesnt fit in that well in english i guess.I am turkish and we have this saying where when something just isnt true even if a million witnesses testify it wont become valid its a little weird to explain but yeah i guess i cant supress thinking in turkish sometimes it just happens.Thankyou so much for the comment though i appreciate it:))
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Beautifully written. Not sure I understand all of it but please don't explain it to me. I like when poetry keeps me guessing.
aww thankyou so much