Hey! For starters, your poem made me think of the band Starset (if you don't know who they are, they use space metaphors and imagery that is really cool) and in this case, I like the play on taking up space on a more grand scale and this conflict of not being able to fit in anywhere. Nice work!

Enjoyed exploring the concept of space with the narrator and the self-critique and reflection they engage in. I found myself wanting to explore the line “i am too much for myself.” 

I wondered if the lower case I’s was intentional to give the poem a youthful, more maturing/questioning stage-of-life feel.

I found myself confused when I was trying to understand the line “it was their space first.” I almost felt indignant, and put myself in the narrator’s shoes and felt lonely…as if I couldn’t be good enough or welcomed even in something as vast as space. 

I did feel like there was room for more exploration here and that there were things left unsaid. 

Thank you for sharing! Definitely enjoyed.

i love how you tied the beginning and the end together with breathing and curling. it really ended the poem nicely and tied everything together in a satisfying way. the references to stars in space is also a great metaphor for your feelings being displayed in the poem. i love the imagery and flow of the poem. it made me feel like i was a star in space and also made it a very easy read. The relation of your thoughts to a supernova is executed perfectly.

Overall a great read. Thanks for sharing!

A beautiful piece, and does well in capturing this feeling. I especially liked the, “I am too much for myself” and, “being left alone with the stars would only allow the thoughts I push down to explode out of me” lines, as they really make you consider this feeling and whether it can truely be escaped from of you yourself can’t accept it. 

They also make you consider if they really are too much for others, or solely too much for themselves and merely perceive it to be that way, as the second line I mentioned highlights the fear of being left alone.

I really enjoyed how you looped the poem in on itself, too


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i feel like i take up too much space

like the way i breathe takes oxygen better fit for someone else 

like the way i stand, curled in on myself is an inconvenience

if i had it my way i would co exist in the stars 

because there is so much space to take up 

but in the same way that i am too much for others

i am too much for myself 

and being left alone with the stars would only allow the thoughts i push down to explode out of me 

and i would never want to inconvenience the stars 

it was their space first 

so i stay, curled into myself, breathing shallowly

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^^^ super cool poem you should read it