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Earthquake like shakes ripple through my body

As my tears fall onto the fault lines the razor made on my skin

The cracks form on my lips from my teeth

Sinking into them to hold me still

My breath unstable, hot, like a volcano

Triggered by the shakes, ready to spew my insides out

The tsunami of feelings rush over me

The wave spreads all the way to my fingers until they feel numb

My hair falls like rain over my face

As I pull it and scream

My voice echoes into the emptiness

The quiet following the earthquake

I have a moment of peace before the aftershock

A brief fleeting moment

But my body won’t hold

The foundation shattered

And I crumble to the floor, in agonizing pain

While the tremors ripple through me

(Wasn’t sure whether to tag this as NSFW but I did just in case.)

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Posted May 6, 2022, 11:05 PM UTC

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aghwake•

Hey, great piece. The imagery is on point helpig me visualize the experience. Seems like an intense feeling, like a panic attack. You did a great job at explaining the feelings. One could say you sank your teeth on it. If I were to change one thing in my opinion I would remove the "it's like.." in the beginning and just begin with earthquake.

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